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White hand stroking my face, clammy
Dead even as you wrapped your arm around me
"Lets go for a ride" you choked
Through green moss, dirt and all that that entails
"She said lets not go too fast" I whisper,
But in myself I know as I wrap my arms
Sink them even, into that half rotted flesh
The warmth of inside scaring off the teeth of the wind

"Your first time?" asks the helmet
And like so often in dreams I see your skull through it
Bleached. Is that how you went?
"You know that!" and a playful slap knocks a maggot ridden arm to the ground

"Dont fight it then" - Dreamlike, as dreams so seldom are
I felt it move beneath us
That lor grumble that forbids denial
And we were off
Overtake the death bus, unseen horror in a tow truck,
And even dare to flip off the family of betrayal and lies

"This is where I have to leave"
Thud of a finger hitting the wheel
"But you'll come back right"
The helmet shook

"Darling, the damned stay dead forever"
©2004-2009 ~panyd
:iconpanyd:

Author's Comments

This is possibly the most emotional poem I've ever written. Its about my friend who died a couple of days ago, and when he took me on my first ever motorbike ride mixed in with...well, stuff that hopefully will never happen to anyone!

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:iconsilvermoonlight55555:
Wow. the subject is powerful enough, but the effect you gave this poem by making the driver already dead has floored me. You have created a truly haunting piece, that while I'm sure can't come close to what you must be feeling, certinally sends a spark of emotion out to the reader. While ll of this is wonderful, I am most impressed with the very last line, "Darling, the damned stay dead forever." Not too frequentally do the words darling, danmed, and dead appear in the same line, and the confusing affect this give is a surperb way to end this poem.

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"Finish each day and be done with it. You have done what you could; some blunders and absurdities have crept in; forget them as soon as you can. Tomorrow is a new day; you shall begin it too serenely ... to be encumbered with your old nonsense"
-RWE
:iconlacomtesseblanche:
Wow this is amazing...as previously stated making the driver already dead really adds a lot to your statement. The ending is wonderful...it leaves such a finality and the same time a question still rings...because do the damned really stay dead...they are in our thoughts...they exist...are they alive? You have very strong emotions and a very creative mind...It is awful that you have to go through this...I know how it is to lose a friend...when it happened to me I could not except it...could not write about it...and denied it...I don't know what you are going through, it is different for everyone, but it is wonderful that you can share it. Hopefully that will help you through it.
:iconamoice:
The choice of words gave this poem an intimate feeling.
The rider being dead yes, creates a hauntingly sad tone to the poem combined with the intimacy between the persona and the rider.

I like the theme of the dead sharing with the living something they are linked with.
It gave more dimensions to this poem and the "ride".
On one hand the ride can be interpreted as a trip down memory lane, or a representation of the walk the living and the dead once did together, while both still alive.

A very memorable piece.

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:pacman:

If there is possibly one thing more important than love,
more complex than love, and more simple than love...
It would be art.

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:iconotakugal15:
Wow. I'm sry for the loss. The imagery of the o=poem really depicts the sorrow of losing a loved one. Especially with the fact that you made him already dead here. Wow....so powerful.

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"Sounds like the goddamn Spanish Inquisition!" - ST IV - Bones

"Wait'll yer sittin' pretty with a case o' Andorian Shingles and see if yer so relaxed with your EYEBALLS BLEEDING." - ST XI - Bones
:iconzim1987:
Awesome, most awesome indeed.

I really like, as others have said, the imagery of the rider being already dead.

Little genius :) *hugs*
:iconbreathefree:
wow..that was...great! i'm so sorry for your loss *hug*

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